From mboxrd@z Thu Jan 1 00:00:00 1970 Return-Path: DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=gmail.com; s=20120113; h=to:cc:from:subject:message-id:date:user-agent:mime-version :content-transfer-encoding; bh=TuwLceCs+PZdgjRpiaOIOvtbPCY4IueWozuKBzNefYY=; b=INveU1eiGCLis28hRnKLS0lPo83KZGkhvXzutI3VPNeV1eCPRFrk05kafYVurTA2ah vk0tVZEoDPAvkxUfdUzTFE4EPUv1JZDEoha4CmC/UaWhWUuj0WP+R//+Ummm2E3ACHhy GzGQYPVTyHh6YcV/JcGVj71OZbMigPH5Ho3GsgaF1ads5LhTOrBxuCM9rx3RptD8BvRV 0D0kR2v9ICVOotUvfM61Ii7PDL5vbQqqUhiQAQqESMsnKa9AL0MhYanVPzBaZhVk3MY7 xdmrhiYy5POUTN7SJkQH/JMVvv4VGNFFB8k/99KRRb3EFxe2e+KwoKdPWO7Dc297bp/U 9mXQ== From: Akira Yokosawa Subject: Some more feedback on Chapter 9 Message-ID: Date: Thu, 28 Jul 2016 22:06:22 +0900 MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=iso-2022-jp Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit To: "Paul E. McKenney" Cc: perfbook@vger.kernel.org, Akira Yokosawa List-ID: Hi Paul, There are still several issues regarding Chapter 9 I want to feedback. I'm afraid most of them are beyond my ability to submit as patches. * At the beginning of Section 9.5.2, there is a credit of the form "Authors: ...". But there is \OriginallyPublished{} command just above the credit. I'm wondering if the credit in the text is necessary. There is a similar credit at the beginning of Section 14.2, but there is no \OriginallyPublished{} command there. This section seems to have been written for perfbook. If this is the case, for a consistent look, it would be better if the credit is moved to Appendix F.1. * Position of Quick Quiz 9.44 looks a little premature. SRCU is mentioned just after the Quick Quiz. * The 2nd sentence of Section 9.5.4.4 ends as "... in the companion article." This seems like a vestige of its origin in LWN. Should be fixed to match the context. * In the introduction of Section 9.5.5, understanding of the whole Chapter 9 is listed in the prerequisite for the "toy" implementation. I suppose recursion is not intended here. * Also in the introduction of Section 9.5.5, Section 9.5.5.2 is not mentioned. * (Typo) In the 2nd paragraph of Section 9.7, there is a redundant "can" in "... so that updates can can operate locally, ...". (Yes, I can submit the fix of this one as a patch. If you want me to do so, please let me know.) * (Apart from Chapter 9) In Section 14.2.10.1, there are four instances of $\dagger$ for introducing notes. I'm wondering if they can be converted to footnotes. I'm not sure where they should be placed in the text, though. I said earlier there were a few issues, but in the end there are a quite a few. I don't mind if some (or all) of them be taken care of later after the upcoming release. Thanks, Akira